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Tuesday, 25 July 2017

the race

                                             The great race

There  once was some girls who saw a poster it said ‘‘ a race today come  to the foster park the winner get a $100 00 dollars and a gold trophy’’.So they race over to the park.They had not started  get so they said can we join in please. Yeah go on  the guy said  go  stand over there but wait what is your names my  is star one of them said my one is angel my one is Ella my one is Bella,okay stand over there  okay then they walked away. A guy said on your marts get set go the girls ran as fast as they could one girl came first place congratulation you have won $100 00 dollars yeah!!!!! She said.Let’s go home and go in the bath because we are dirty bye one of them said.after there bath they watch a movies. then we fell asleep with popcorn in my mouth.


The End.

1 comment:

  1. Hey Ella,
    Wow that sounds like a pretty amazing day! How many other people were in their race? This would be awesome if it was based on a true story! I like that you have the great race as the title not just the race. I think your next step is to go back and add some more capital letters, fullstops and speech marks in the right place.

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